From Fear & Trembling, (Double-Edged Publishing)
(Cover art © 2008 by E.J. Mickels II, art wrangler at F&T)
"An Evening's Walk"
by Wesley Lambert
This short suspense piece worked hard at setting the scene - proper foreshadowing, couple red herrings, eerie descriptions, slow build - then a quick climax and conclusion. And while I enjoyed the surprise ending, it was more cute than creepy and so all of the urgency of the buildup fell a bit flat. I might have cut the heavy description (written in a very literary style, competently executed, but a bit much), planted a few more obvious clues, and turned this into a true flash fiction. Still, a fun little story.
About 2150 words
My Rating: 6 of 10
If time, read it over lunch.